Tomato Girl by Abby

“Wow”, Claire looked in the mirror and she was RED, she thought she looked like a huge tomato. Then she screamed in the mirror because Claire didn’t like how she looked. Then she went down the town to the medical centre to see what was wrong, the doctor told Claire there was nothing wrong with her, she was just imagining it.

Claire said “that’s why nobody gave me bad looks on the way here”.

She went back home and looked in the mirror and looked RED, then went to look in another mirror and look RED again

She thought her house was haunted.

4 thoughts on “Tomato Girl by Abby”

  1. Hello Abby,
    I like how you used foods to describe how Claire looked but next time work on using descriptive words, it will make the reader wanna keep reading.
    Keira
    Room 4
    New Zealand

  2. Hi Abby I loved your story because it had good describing words.
    I wonder why she was red ?
    It reminded me of a film I saw before .
    You will be an author one day .
    BYE
    Dylan
    Mrs Boyces Class

  3. Hi Abby, I really enjoyed your story this week. Try to use more descriptive words to keep the reader interested.

    Sincerely,
    Kam

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