The Mysterious Creature by Jessica H

I was outside one day with my friends. We were just walking around my estate because we had nothing else to do. All of a sudden we saw a weird creature my friends started to walk up to it. I stayed put because I didn’t know what it was and I didn’t want to get hurt. I was about to go up to it when my friends came back screaming. I asked what was wrong they told me that the creature talks. That’s when the creature came up to us  ‘which way to the shops?’ It panted. We didn’t know what to do so we ran.

2 thoughts on “The Mysterious Creature by Jessica H”

  1. Hi Jessica, I really liked your story this week. The only improvement is to describe the creature a little more I had a hard time reading it.

  2. Hello Jessica, I like how you started your story showing that it was just an ordinary sort of a day so it comes as more of a surprise when the creature appeared. I think it was good that you “stayed put”. This created more tension and I could really visualise the character not being able to move because they were scared/surprised. I think I would have run away too when my friends came back screaming. Well done.

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