The Crafty Castle by Daniel

One day I was walking in the forest with my mates when we saw a big red castle. “Lets go inside” I said and they said alright. The leaves were rolling down the hill like they didn’t want to be near the castle. We went in and didn’t see much but then a really pale man walked over and said “Who let you in?”. We said we walked in and he told us to go to this real white room. I said this is really weird and we all ran out. Suddenly the man ran after us, but after a while he stopped chasing us.

4 thoughts on “The Crafty Castle by Daniel”

  1. Daniels,
    At first the friends seemed to be on an ordinary walk in the forest, but the castle was a bit of a surprise. I was fearful when the man questioned them, and I guess so were the boys because they ran away. Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, and Buddy Class Teacher, GES at FMS, Guilderland, NY, USA

  2. Hi Daniel I like your story because I like the the way the man ran after you and your friends.

    I wonder why that man was chasing you was he hiding something?

    Thankfully you and your friends got away safely.

    goodbye for now from Dylan in Mrs Boyce’s class.

  3. I think your crafty castle is quite a creepy castle, Daniel. I really like the sentence ‘The leaves were rolling down the hill like they didn’t want to be near the castle’. That really should be a warning! I am glad you all managed to get away in the end.

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