Scooter Chaos by Luke

Today is the day I can finally go to Fluffy Park to the hover scooter contests. I met my friends at the entrance. When I went in my friend Red said there is concrete spikes coming up from the ground. Then I got in and there were no other competitors!! Me and my friends danced because I won by default. Now I am going home with my trophy, then bang! My class bully is here to take my trophy in his robot suit! I pushed a button on my scooter to transform into a mech and told him to go home, so he did.

3 thoughts on “Scooter Chaos by Luke”

  1. Luke,
    Your piece read like a strange dream where odd, unexpected details just seem to pop in with no obvious reason. Too funny. I think you were creative in the way you included each of the focus words.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., BUDDY CLASS Teacher, GES at FMS, Guilderland, NY, USA

  2. Hi Luke, you did well with onomatopoeia. What was the class bullies name and color of suit? You did really good!

  3. Hi,
    I like how you made your scooter so it can do all sorts of amazing things. It’s kind of like a mech.
    Keep it up!

    -Dominic V.
    GES at FMS

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