Nate woke up. He was stuck under rubble from the old building. He tried calling for help but no one heard him then he saw a violin. He grabbed it and used it to wedge the rubble off him. He got up and ran out off the room. He went into another room he looked around seeing a picture of an elephant and happy faces painted on the walls “this must be the kids room,” he said to himself. Suddenly he heard a car stop outside. He looked outside but the car was empty then he heard a gun being reloaded…
Hi Darragh.
I like the part where he got out from under the rubble.
It reminds me of a book.
I wonder what happened next.
Bye for now From Adam Mrs Boyces 5th class.
Hi Darragh
I liked this story because of great grammar
I wonder where the boy was
Good story
From Warren Mrs Boyces 5th class
Hi Darragh
I liked your story
Why was he in rubble I wonder
Bye from Aidan
Kanturk BNS