Out of Tune by Zach

I woke up on a Saturday morning. I decided to go down stairs at 9am. I went down stairs and turned on the TV. Shortly after, my sister came down stairs and went to play the piano. She tried to play it but it was completely out of tune. So when my dad woke up my sister told him that the piano was out of tune. He tried to tune it himself , but it didn’t work. He called someone to tune it. After tow weeks the guy that was going to tune the piano came. He tuned the piano and said “ there was a dead RAT in the piano!”

4 thoughts on “Out of Tune by Zach”

  1. Hi Zach, this is a good creative piece of work and a good response to the 100WC prompt. I really enjoyed how the story built up with decent descriptions of everyday happenings in your house. The timeline was good and the structure of you piece was excellent. I loved the sudden surprise ending, a RAT!

  2. Hi Zach
    If my dad couldn’t tune the piano I’d be worried but you were very smart a called a professional.
    But two weeks is a long time but you were very patient.
    To find a dead rat inside it that must have been creepy.
    From Matthew D
    Mrs Boyce’s class
    Please comment on my story.

  3. Hi Zach
    Your story was really interesting and i really enjoyed reading it.
    It reminded me of Shrek 2.
    Did it fix the tune?
    Mrs Boyces Class
    Bye for now Marc

  4. Hi Zach i loved the part where they found out that there was a dead rat in the piano. Bye for now Tadhg Mrs Boyce’s class please comment on mine

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