My Scooter Ride by Aaron

I am riding on my brand new red,shiny scooter. I am going quite fast down the big, green hill at the end of my estate. I got to the bottom of the hill, I was so tired. I sat down and stared at the big, fluffy clouds, they looked like cotton candy. I started riding around the street when I saw my dad who was dancing with his dog, because he was practicing for the circus. I went up to him and asked if I could dance with him. He said ‘sure no problem.’ So I danced with him until we both fell onto the concrete because we were both so tired.

2 thoughts on “My Scooter Ride by Aaron”

  1. Aaron,
    Your piece made me smile to think of the narrator, his father, and the dog all dancing until they collapsed–exhausted. That was a funny image.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Buddy Class Teacher, GES at FMS, Guilderland, NY, USA

  2. I really liked your piece especially when your staring up at the clouds because I could picture you staring at the clouds , but next time you should add more to the ending

    Anthony

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