Horrible Holiday by Jessica M

“Hurry up!” The plane is leaving in ten minutes stated mam. As we arrived at the bording gate the lady told us we were extremely lucky as they were just about to set off. We rushed on to the plane and took our seats. We were going on a holiday to Spain for a week. When we arrived in Spain we got the bus to the hotel. The next day we went out for a walk but although it was Saturday nothing was opened and we didn’t know why. Just then we heard a siren and realised that there was a warning for the whole of Spain to stay indoors as there was a storm approaching!

10 thoughts on “Horrible Holiday by Jessica M”

  1. Hi Jessica,

    What an interesting way to respond to the prompt! I can imagine being really disappointed if you were on holiday and then had to stay indoors.
    Next time try to include more feelings so your reader empathises with you.
    Mrs Moore
    Team 100WC
    London

  2. Hi Jessica M
    I really liked your story
    I really want to go to Spain
    I liked the way you used the prompt
    Great story
    Bye for now Liam A
    Mrs Boyces class

  3. Hello Jessica.
    I liked your story because it is in another country.
    I wonder if the storm ruined your holiday.
    It reminds me of when I went to Spain.
    Bye for now,
    Benny, Mrs Boyce’s Class.

  4. Hi Jessica M
    I love your writhing about the Horrible Holiday . my favorite part is when you got to Spain for your holiday and all the shops were closed.

    from Taisha

  5. Hi, I liked the story. I do like on how the story took a twist, and a storm was added to it. Anyway, will there be more to this..? I did like it, bye.

  6. Hi Jessica M,
    That was an extraordinary piece of writing , well done. Did this actually happen to you?
    I was wondering what happens after you find out that a storm is approaching did you make back to your hotel?
    Keep on writing,
    Bailee

  7. To Jessica M,
    I really liked your story and how you were going to Spain.
    I liked how there was a storm approaching too.
    Keep up the good work!
    From Madison

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