Closed Shops by Darragh

Fred got up. He checked what day it was. It was Saturday. He went to get some breakfast but when he opened the fridge there was nothing there so he decided to go to the shop. He went outside and started to head for the shop. He got to the shops but the door wouldn’t open he tried to open another door but nothing would open although it was Saturday nothing was open. He grabbed a bin and tried to break a window but the glass was bullet proof. He was waiting for a while but know one came so he went home.

4 thoughts on “Closed Shops by Darragh”

  1. Hi Darragh.
    I like your story.
    I wonder why non of the shops were open.
    It must have been very annoying.
    Bye for now.
    Ronan, Mrs Boyce’s class.

  2. Hi Darragh

    You had a fantastic story.
    I wonder why the shops weren’t opened.
    I wonder why the shop had bullet proof glass.

    Please comment on my story.
    Mrs Boyces class

  3. Your story is very clearly written and easy to follow Darragh. I like that change of pace from quite clam to ‘He grabbed a bin and tried to break the window’. I can feel the storyteller’s frustration and then disappointment as he has no alternative but to go home. I hope he found some food eventually!

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