Birthday by Mya

One day I was sleeping and I got woken up by a noise in my box. I turned on my light and looked inside it. It was a phone for my birthday, but then my mam came in. I was holding the phone and I threw it up in the air. I tried to repair it but it didn’t work. I said to my mam ‘but I had to see what was inside.’ I could tell she was disappointed. She thought I was careless. I felt endangered because she was mad. But I got the gist, I’m not to open stuff I’m not meant to.

2 thoughts on “Birthday by Mya”

  1. Kia ora from New Zealand Mya.
    Isn’t it so important to be able to see inside things to figure out how they work! I think it is perfectly reasonable!
    I love your final sentence – ‘I got the gist…’ That sounds really good, as does the rest of your writing. Keep up the fantastic effort.
    If you get a chance, come along to our class blog at: https://rakau19.edublogs.org/
    Ms M #100WC

  2. I Hate it when i drop my phone. You could describe or say why this box was in your room.
    I loved the part when you said i got the gist. And why was the box in your room.

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