A Shopping Day by Emily

It was a slow damp winter’s day. We were getting bored in the house. There was nothing to do. My mother decided to go shopping in Swords shopping centre. So we hopped in the car and we set off. My sister and I played ‘I spy with my little eye’ to make the journey quicker. We came to a traffic light. The light went red. A cyclist stopped beside us. “Which way to the shop?” It panted. We told the way to the shop. Suddenly the light went green. We went off to the shopping centre.It was a great day.

2 thoughts on “A Shopping Day by Emily”

  1. Well done for using the prompt so well in your story this week. I enjoyed the way in which you set the scene at the start and made it sound like the character was longing for an adventure!
    Think about your use of ‘Suddenly’ – was it a surprise that the traffic light went green? Your punctuation is perfect and you should be proud of how hard you have worked on it!

    Keep up the wonderful writing!

  2. I love all of your descriptive words. Do you like shopping? Make sure you put spaces after punctuation.
    Keep up the good work.

    Sincerely, Ella

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