100 w/c – Lorcan

At dawn and dusk, twilight slips through the gap. On one special dawn a little Angel girl looked up at the mauve sky. She got very tearful because her brother had died at dawn. She decided she would grow three carrots for her  brother Steel. She grew them because that was his favourite food. She sang a little song every dawn it went like this, “under the mauve sky I can see my brother flying on a carrot ship.” Her two dogs would sit beside her, Milly and Steel Jr. Sometimes even the robins would join in, this would make her smile.

7 thoughts on “100 w/c – Lorcan”

  1. Hi Lorcan,
    Great use of the words that we had to use this week,
    It reminds me of a story Under The Hawthorn Tree,
    It was very tearful like this story this week,
    By Dylan O’C,
    Ms.Boyces 6th class.

  2. Hi Lorcan,
    I loved your story,
    I thought it was very emotional,
    It is nice that the birds would join in on the song and that would make the Angel girl happy – Kayden, Mrs Boyce’s Class

  3. That’s such a sad story, Lorcan. But you’ve written it beautifully and I have to say that this is my favourite of all your stories that I’ve read. Well done and keep up the amazing writing!

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