100 w/c – Emily

It finally came, Halloween night .I dressed up as a scary zombie and my sister dressed up as an orange pumpkin.My father brought us trick or treating. We had lots of fun going house to house. We met a boy dressed up as a samurai fighter. After we went went to a massive bonfire and we danced around the bonfire clumsily after a while we went home because it was getting so late. My mam said”you smell like smoke”. So I got a bath and watched tv and ate sweets for a while then I went to bed.

2 thoughts on “100 w/c – Emily”

  1. Sounds like quite an interesting and fun-packed evening Emily. I wonder how people reacted opening their doors to see a zombie and a pumpkin! And what about the samurai fighter costume? Could you provide some details of how the boy was dressed to help spark your readers’ imaginations?
    Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.

  2. Hi Emily, one thing that I liked about your piece is your word choice like “massive” instead of just “big”. Did you know that I wrote about Halloween night too. How did you come up with this idea? Another thing I like about your piece is that you wrote about a real thing that could happen. Something you could consider is including more information about the samurai fighter because I don’t really know what that is.

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