100 w/c Caitlin

“Its 12:00 o’clock at night, I can’t believe we are still out Caitlin,” said my annoying little brother.

I say he is annoying because he is always banging on his black and white drums at home pretending that he knows what he is doing.

“Are we there yet?” he asked.

“You’ll find out in a while now shhhhh” I told him.

“I’m borrrreee…..” he moaned.

I interrupted him as we finally reached the spot.

“You go in there” I said as I pointed toward a boarded up house.

We walked over to the crooked door and suddenly we heard a rustling sound beside us.

“What was that?” my brother said trembling.

” I don’t know but it came down the drainpipe!” I said as we both ran away with fear.

3 thoughts on “100 w/c Caitlin”

  1. Great story Caitlin. I’m laughing as I have a ‘little’ brother. Well, he was ‘little’ a long time ago, but he’s 44 now and a lot taller than me! He’s not annoying at all now!
    Great story and great use of quotation marks too. Very well done.

  2. This is super writing Caitlin. You’ve brought the whole scene to life for me, the reader. Your added sentence about your brother playing the drums helps me to recognise just how annoying he is and the adjectives ‘crooked’ and ‘rustling’ place me right there with you as you experience the anxiety of this unknown situation.
    Great use of the prompt and thanks for sharing.
    I’m sending this off for this weeks showcase 🙂
    Jackie (Team 100 WC)
    New Plymouth
    New Zealand

  3. Hi Caitlin
    My little brother is really annoying as well,
    You used some great words
    I wonder who our what was coming down the drainpipe,
    Bye for now Danny Mrs Boyce’s class.

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