100 w/c by Tadhg

Pablo and Jack were out camping by the coast of Italy. They were getting ready to go hiking up the mountain near the camp site. Pablo got up and put on Jack’s glasses by mistake. The thing was they had the same glasses but different strengths. Pablo didn’t realise and Jack did. He started banging into rocks on the hike. Then eventually Pablo realised but it was too late. Jack had already cut his head and his legs. Pablo had to call an ambulance. They were air lifted to the hospital. Jack’s Dad asked how did it happen ‘I don’t remember putting it on’ said Pablo.

3 thoughts on “100 w/c by Tadhg”

  1. Your story is really good. I like the way you ended it with a cliff hanger that makes people want to read more. I would suggest maybe some more sentence verity. What did da say after Pablo said “I don’t remember putting it on.’’ Also there should be two apostrophes after on.

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