100 w/c by Holly

It was a Saturday morning, all was calm. From a distance I could hear an irritating screeching sound. I slowly made my way towards the noise. AHH!! A spaceship was in the centre of a bright green field. A woman approached me. She was wearing clothes from centuries ago. “Save my family from those creatures called aliens”, she said in a scared voice. I was terrified. I hopped into the empty spaceship with a worried look on my face. Everything became silent when it just wouldn’t take off. My face turned tomato red. I couldn’t make the stupid spaceship move…

4 thoughts on “100 w/c by Holly”

  1. Well done on your story Holly. You’ve written a very interesting story. You have used lots of describing words which really helps your reader. Your writing is getting better and better.
    Keep up the great work.
    Ms Brennock

  2. Hi this was an very interesting story. I think you should describe how you were feeling a little bit more. Why were there no aliens included in this piece. Good job keep up the good work.

    Your Friend,

    Kam

  3. Oh wow, that’s interesting. I like how the spaceship didn’t work.
    Are you gonna try to make it work???
    Hopefully you can, the world must NEVERRR have aliens on it.

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