100 w/c by Emmanuel

It was finally summer and the Browne family was about to go on holidays. They were planning to go Spain for the very first time. Harry the son of the Browne’s was an only child who had hard shinny brown hair and blue ocean-like eyes. Harry had never been on a plane so he was very eager to go to Spain. They arrived at the Airport and got onto the plane. Everyone was very excited for the plane to take off. The pilot regretted take off because the plane went up and all of a sudden came back down. The pilot tried again, that was when it just wouldn’t take off. Everyone had to go to to the exit that was in their vicinity.

3 thoughts on “100 w/c by Emmanuel”

  1. Well done Emmanuel. You have used some great describing words in your story. You have also included some of the vocabulary words, which is great.
    Keep up the great work.
    Ms Brennock

  2. I really like the going to Spain part, because I kind of want to go to Spain.
    You should put more commas.
    I’m confused why didn’t the plane crash when it wouldn’t just take off?
    I really liked it you should make another one.

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