100 w/c by Donnchadh

I went to Wild Ireland to see the bears. There was a big hill, it looked nice to go down on a scooter. When I got over to the bear exhibit the ground was nicely laid out of concrete. The exhibit was very beautiful, the bears were fluffy. It was lunch time for the bears and they ate the red apples. When lunch time was over they all went over to the pool and had a dance in the pool. After that they all fell asleep. I went over to the wolves, they are cute and they play a lot.

2 thoughts on “100 w/c by Donnchadh”

  1. Hey Donnchadh!(Sorry if I spelled it wrong)This story sounds very cute! Some of the words that were in the story were words that I also put in my 100 word challenge. I hope I can see another on from you!

  2. Kia ora from New Zealand Donnchadh.
    I think that you have the makings of a pretty good story here – I am assuming that this is about perhaps something that you can see in a museum maybe?
    One thing that I think you might look at is trying to join some of your sentences together, choosing really good vocabulary to make your writing sound superb! have a go at that next time and see how you get on.
    If you get a chance, come to our class blog at: https://rakau19.edublogs.org/
    Ms M #100WC

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