100 w/c – Ben F

One day a girl called Ellie came home from school. Her dad met her at the front door. He looked all excited and bursting to tell Ellie something. ‘ Ellie!’ , he exclaimed, ‘I have a big surprise for you!’. Ellie walked into the kitchen and sitting at the kitchen table was a monkey. The monkey was light brown in colour with big brown eyes and even bigger ears. He was smiling from ear to ear at Ellie, excited to see her. Ellie jumped up and down with joy. She turned to her dad and hugged him. Just then she heard a loud crash. When she turned back to the monkey, he was not smiling any more. Neither was dad. Dad’s laptop was on the floor broken.

8 thoughts on “100 w/c – Ben F”

  1. Hi Ben,
    I loved reading your story again this week. Well done!
    You built up the tension well from the surprise and delight of getting a pet monkey to the despair of seeing the laptop on the ground. Super work!

    Happy Christmas to you, Ms Brennock & all your classmates.
    I look forward to reading more of your adventures in 2018.

    Best Wishes.
    Mrs Boyce, ( Team 100wc)

  2. Hi Ben,
    I like your story because you used nice adjectives,
    Have a lovely Christmas and a splendid new year,
    From Naglis,
    Mrs Boyce’s Class

  3. Hi Ben.
    I like the part where he got her a monkey that was nice.
    I wonder why the monkey got mad.
    Merry Christmas and a happy new year.
    From Adam Mrs boyc’s class.

  4. Hi Ben.
    I like your story it was funny.
    It reminds me of a film.
    I wonder what happens next.
    I wish you a merry Christmas Szymon Mrs Boyce’s Class.

  5. Hi Ben
    Your story this week .
    It really expressed the feeling of happynes and dispear
    Another great story this week
    I want to wish your class a happy xmas
    from Mathew O’G

  6. I really like your story because it is funny.
    Why did the monkey do that.
    From Dylan Mrs Boyces class

  7. Hi Ben
    I wonder why the monkey got mad
    I liked when dad got her a monkey you dont get them every day
    It remiand me of when I got pups and I never knew until I got home
    merry Christmas an a happy and healthy new year

  8. Hi Ms.Brennock and your class,
    Happy New Year ????
    May God bless you

    From Fortune in Mr.Russell’s class??????❤?

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