100 w/c – Ashley

To: Jack

From: Tom

From : Human country (THAT I DONT KNOW THE NAME OF)

Oh Jack, help me. I am a Lego man not a human!

I found a hous’e with three children a lady and a man, they rip my head off and if thats not bad enough………….THEY HAVE A CAT!!!

Well at least I have the best breakfast,pancakes with the most scrumptious purple sauce.

I got trapped by a million ladybirds on a woodland walk.

After that a swan bit my hand off, a dog licked my face, I got stuck in a tree and finally that cat chewed my face now I look like a frisbee !!!!!!!!!!

Oh great the rotweiler is eating me again.😥

Tom.

3 thoughts on “100 w/c – Ashley”

  1. Hi Ashley,
    This is a really nice piece, a great use of the prompt! This week’s prompt is photograph of a Lego figure with a camera, swarmed with ladybugs. Bringing visual effect to the picture, you describe a setting which follows a character in an abstract setting, a Lego-man photographer. By setting out the plot early in the piece, an abstract setting, you create a structure which gives the piece stability and puts the reader in the centre of the action. Using this makes the reader feel attached to the piece, and makes them more engaged. This makes the piece interesting right from the start. The theme of Lego is one that many will be familiar with, even in their own personal lives, as most people will have experienced spending time making Lego with either friends, family or by themselves, or will have watched other people complete Lego sets in their houses. This makes it very relatable to the reader. This makes the reader imagine such a visual description of the setting as a whole. I can relate to this too as I love spending time building Lego, relishing in the chance to unwind and concentrate on a light hearted project for a short period of time. I have enjoyed building such Lego sets from a young age, and loved going to Legoland, so this was a great read for me! By explaining clearly the atmosphere, how the character is writing to a friend, you engage with the reader and add to the setting. You use imagery which fits perfectly with the setting. Bringing in specific information like how the character’s names were Tom and Jack, demonstrates great imagination. This puts the reader in the front of the story, and this really makes you focus on the piece. Emphasis on the character’s worry that they are really struggling in the human world, almost feeling like a prisoner being tortured, fully fleshes out your point and makes it very apparent for the reader. The piece continues to develop, as we find out that while Tom is the legoman, the person he is writing too may be human, suggesting a strange bond between the lego and humans in this fictitious world. Although the setting is an abstract one, fitting with the Lego theme, this is more common than initially thought as many films and books have often explored abstract relationships between inanimate objects and humans. The moments of carnage for the Lego character, particularly in describing his suffering at the hands of both animals and humans, really captures the worry in the piece. The ending of him being again attacked, this time by a Rottweiler, adds a further twist to the piece and leaves the reader feeling incredibly sorry for the character. Good use of grammar and punctuation too, especially your use of exclamation marks. Keep up the good work!

  2. Hi,
    I liked your story and that you imagined that you were a lego man.
    I can’t imagine the pain you encountered and how much it would’ve hurt for you head to be shaped like a frisbee! That was a great similie.
    Bye,
    From Naglis.
    Mrs Boyce’s Class

    Please comment on my stories at https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/tag/naglis/

  3. Hi Ashley,
    I think your story is very funny especially when he says they have a cat,
    I think your story is very imaginative,
    I like pancakes but I don’t think I would like one with purple sauce,
    Danny Mrs Boyce’s Class.

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